Monday, August 4, 2008

Lifeless….. II



I looked outside the window pane.

The cool breeze froze my soul,
It reminded me of your touch.

The beautiful smell of wet earth choked me,
It reminded me of your scent.

The touch of water parched my body,
It reminded me of your tears.

The sounds of the drops deafened me
I could hear you call out for me in them.

Dark clouds were a relief,
Thunder, music to the ears and
Lightening felt like a ray of forgotten hope.

Stop it. This laughter.
It makes me want to cry.
Stop it. Those tears.
They make me want to die.

The outer me flawless.
The inner me, lifeless……

13 comments:

Anonymous said...

is your life messed up? I mean it is okay, no big deal..

Well it made me feel amazed the poem was brilliant... yes you saw it right... pretty up class.

i do not know how it may sound, if it is only literary and you are as happy as the cold coke can on a Sunday afternoon. I am much relieved.

all the best anyway.. keep posting.

What's In A Name ? said...

bettering urself ?

Whats in a name.......... said...

jnm- no,lifes not messed up, not really...just a momentary sad phase.thanx neway!!

wian- cant say thats true!!

Psychedelic said...

its so not you....!!!!

behind brown eyes... said...

omg! you give the heebie jeebies girl!!! sheeeeeeeeeeeesh!!!!!!!!!! here come the goosebumps!

nice poetry though! :)

Whats in a name.......... said...

psy- or atleast you pray its not!!

bbe- tanku!!

Scribblers Inc said...

good stuff...

Scribblers Inc.

Whats in a name.......... said...

scribblers- thankyou:)

Wizard OfCourse said...

good work. pretty good. but i wonder why such a picture?

Johny-walker said...

Mariya, mariya.. this is it! This is the limit.
I read it, and then I was 'My lower jaw fell open and I was dumb struck', and I said, Why mariya mariya?
What had you in mind when you wrote it, what had you in mind?!

Whats in a name.......... said...

johny- first, thank you for makin sure i never forget how to spell my name!lol
well there is a lot on my mind and this is how i like to get over it!
did you like the poem tho??

Johny-walker said...

wooh.. "there is a lot on my mind and this is how i like to get over it!"
I know there's a lot on your mind, and thats what i asked.. Give me a piece of that lot up there.
Waise, ya, the poem is awesome!! loved it.

Whats in a name.......... said...

johny- mariya says thankyou!