Tuesday, November 25, 2008

Lifeless III


The clothes lie in the dryer like you had left them,
The stains on the tea mugs remain.
Everything seems to have changed today,
Yet it all seems the same.

My forehead is still moist with your kiss.
My eyes still unlock everyday to be able to see your face,
My heart still beats with the hope of a twist in fate.

The stench of fresh flowers chokes me to death
The laughter of innocence makes my eyes go wet.
The starlit sky looks like a thousand thorns set up to bruise the already battered.
The wounded moon reminds me of a fa├žade of happiness, hiding in its hollows,
A thousand dreams left shattered.

Stop it. This wait. It makes me want to die.
Stop it. This laughter it makes me want to cry.


The outer me flawless.
The inner me….lifeless.

14 comments:

My Cenotaph said...

amazing...:) i am proud of you! its so vivid and so colse to life...throbbing, pulsating, reality...its really cool.

Whats in a name.......... said...

my cenotaph- i m glad u liked it!:)

comfortably numb said...

am all numb now...seems so apt
v well written...u deserve a standing ovation but am too dazed n reminiscent to do tht now

rantravereflect/ jane said...

wowwww :) came here through comfortably numb..
n i went numb there..
cos there are sooo many times i feel just the same way- the feeling is so intense it just chokes ya to tears and death, n the worst part is, like ya say in ya last two lines, to the outside world, ya're flawless- like nothing ever happened, n inside, ya're all shattered!

great lines :) keep it up..

Anonymous said...

brilliant....
am touched and a little inspired by you...now i am also going to write something like you did...
but your attempt is a splendid one.indeed

Whats in a name.......... said...

Numb- u r too kind!thanx a ton!:)

rantravereflect- i am grateful to numb;s blog that it made you drop by!i know. there are times, wen the outer you is flawless and the inner you, lifeless!! glad you liked it!

mujtaba- gee thanks so much!! i m honoured!!:)

Royal Bengal Tigress said...

Why such darkness and morbidity?

Whats in a name.......... said...

tigress- bas!!was feelin like it.

Wizard OfCourse said...

i am absolutely proud of you! you resonated my thoughts through this poem...
just one little question: why such a gory picture? i mean...blood and stuff...
oh..and by the way...i liked it so much that i read it thrice!! :D

Whats in a name.......... said...

muah muah!!lol
thy comments make me feel sooo nice!!and thus they are highly awaited!!hehe
p.s-dont take the muah too seriously!!lol

Wizard OfCourse said...

whoa!! what luck! kisses and all that...
i am flattered and floored :D
i am always more than willing to comment mademoiselle mariya...
you think i am mad enough to take them seriously?! i know yours are reserved for someone else (the only problem is...we don't know who)...hehehe..
(gotcha!) wink wink...

behind brown eyes... said...

hey girl...i am out of words...somethings are just ineffable i guess...anyway, hope you are feeling more full of life now...if not, then just give me a call and i'll send a thousand kisses of fresh breaths your way :)

Whats in a name.......... said...

BBE- yes. i am good!!those are just momentary phases. and me loveeessss you!!!

Wizard OfCourse said...

typo error! anyway...miss whatever you rname is (that's drawn from your screen name) :p
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